2nd tiktok LR

 WWW: 

Interesting idea

Energetic presenter

Promo at end

On-screen graphics

POV shot

Subtitle font

Robotic

Too scripted

Pace

EBI:

More edits 

Lack of shots

Cuts - jump cuts

More scenes/interviews

Audio quality

Abrupt ending

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To make this better I will try to put on a better performance when I re-shoot this TikTok, I will keep the same text and on screen graphics but will try to incorporate more dynamic and compelling shots to keep my audience interested.

Next time, I will hopefully give my self more time to perfect the craft of it all instead of trying to cram it into a short amount of time.